Comments on "Grey City XVIII" - Faerye Net

re: Yeah! Grey City

2008-08-11T15:36:10+00:00

P.S. I am guesstimating it’ll go to 25 parts, but a grain of salt is advised.

2008-08-11T15:34:43+00:00

You know, I stumbled over that when I did my out-loud reading (a good way to polish one’s prose) but I didn’t trust my gut. I think you’re right.

I’ll go mind-police it to a different word.

2008-08-11T14:53:09+00:00

Seems an interesting turn, I had expected you to be winding down slowly, not ratcheting back up.

For what little it’s worth, this seemed a little jarring to be coming in the thoughts of young Erian, “unknown part of this inimical city.”